Writing a haiku today
brother Nick’s first sighting
of a brown snake on the farm
so that now it's spring
or the possibility on the radar
if you believe the pundits
the earth is kind
against the underbelly
the sun dries the grass
where that leaves the chooks
well it's anyone’s guess
except it left me here
several drafts later
the memory of a memory
of a memory of my friend
a heartbeat quickens
the first snake of the season
no photos taken
hell just one heartbeat
you’d think it would be
easy to get right
Haiku hides in verse
ReplyDeletelike nestled snake rustles in
syntactical grass
Ha...that's easy for some! :)
Deletelooks like seven of the beasties to me
ReplyDeletethough yr at the senryu border there ---
esp --
several drafts later
the memory of a memory
of a memory of my friend
Thanks for listening. Pretty loose haiku. There could be six 5-7-5 syllable haikus with lines that miss out by a one syllable heartbeat...or 3. If I had to, I'd call them tercets (linked in theme) and not really haiku. There is only one that has the strict 17 syllable count. I'd hesitate to call any a senryu -- or a haiku. Maybe I call it the right heartbeat. Cheers.
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