behind the tinted glass the old man
she bent to smell a flower
the fall of her dark hair
the young man saw
her hand curl
pluck
hide
a flower
enclose petals
in the jar of her hand
she gave it to her mother
who could not come to the garden
who could not come to the garden
Gorgeous!
ReplyDeletebeautiful
ReplyDeletebeautiful, but I was a little confused by the references to the old man and the young man
ReplyDeleteFair enough, Robbie. Thank for the feedback.
ReplyDeleteI was trying to show two people watching her steal the flower, the old man behind the tinted glass, the young man not.
ReplyDeletebeautiful
ReplyDeleteWonderful image here: enclose petals/in the jar of her hand
ReplyDeleteBeautiful poem