Monday, October 24, 2016

Kristen de Kline #18 - Payback


They lied
It doesn't feel sweet: Payback
A moment of fist pumps
A slap of hands
An SMS with the words: FREE AT LAST!
A mouse - make that something more menacing, larger - a rat perhaps?
Hacking into
Gnawing away
At the foundations your foundations
They lied
It doesn't feel sweet
An off-taste in your lips mouth words
Aerial coverage of a blitzed city on the ABC news
Still awake 3am 4 am 5 am 6 am can't sleep
It doesn't feel sweet


  1. terse, menacing - makes me feel uneasy - well done Kristen

  2. This feeling, the word that commonly describes an experience - sweet - and when experienced it isn't so at all - great subject to explore and dramatise, the background of the blitzed city also a poignant and unsettling way to draw us to the end

  3. Thanks David & Sarah - glad the menace and unsettling nature came through. Cheers :)


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