Wednesday, September 19, 2018

Tug Dumbly # 17 - Renaissance


We pine to be rebirthed like stolen cars
because we deserve it.

(‘Deserve’s got nothing to do with it’.
William Munny, blowing away     
Sheriff Little Bob in Unforgiven).

We’re greedy for identity,
if not by theft then legally,
to become the sum of our shopped for selves

all that murderous choice,
all that toothpaste
avalanching from the shelves.

It’s exhausting, this chain gang
chipping at rock to find your voice.

Be nice to just say ‘no. My Authentic Self
fled years ago. Last I saw he kicked in a window
and bounded across the asylum paddock
yodelling into the trees.

I like to think he’s still out there,
living off roasted Quoll, happy’.
  
But ‘no!’ they say, ‘you must seek
and distil your destined stock

strain the essence to a primal broth
through a stocking of gold brocade

reduced to a thin clear soup of you.
Once you got that you got it made.




4 comments:

  1. Curious to know if anyone's got an opinion - could/should the poem end on the line 'living off roasted Quoll, happy'? ... It's tighter, but does it lose too much?

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  2. I reckon it can do without the last bit Tug. The thin clear soup is a nice image though.

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  3. Tug, This is very fine as is, I reckon, but close the last quote with a mark? I.e. where is the end of 'you must seek ?

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