Beautiful, Myron. Also...Butterfly childrenin the playgroundzigzag
Thank you, Rob. I like your playful permutations on my work. They help me see other possibilities.
ah, lovely, yes
And pertinent - so many butterflies in our garden this last week! Mostly Caper Whites on their mysterious migration: ‘Breeds in vast numbers on trees and shrubs of the genus Capparis (Wild Caper, Mock Orange) and enormous numbers of Caper Whites sometimes aggregate on coastal headlands before flying out to sea.’ Queensland MuseumJust wondering if you need the word 'in'?
Thank you for your comments and your fascinating question, John. I believe the haiku needs the word "in" as it makes the middle line a pivot on which lines one and three can swing. Why do you think the haiku would be better without the preposition?
Partly because you (I) tend to read the first two lines together then pause and then zigzag.For me the middle line pivots nicely without the 'in' and allows the butterflies to play as well Cheers
Yes, I like your idea very much. Thank you, John. I will try it out.
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