Tuesday, April 12, 2016

2 migration (human haiku) senryu (Jeltje Fanoy #11)


hopeful

of a new life

th distance grows

 

everyone feels hurt

you’ll be gone

forever
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8 comments:

  1. Efi HatzimanolisApril 10, 2016 at 5:02 PM

    yes, that's it!

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  2. Sarah St Vincent WelchApril 10, 2016 at 5:07 PM

    both sides, great! :) I love the shape of these.

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  3. Myron LysenkoApril 10, 2016 at 6:07 PM

    Hi Jeltje. These moving little poems show good empathy. I believe they are senryu rather than haiku.

    I don't think they are haiku as they are not about nature, they do not use sense images and they do jnot capture one moment.

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    1. jeltjeApril 11, 2016 at 12:49 PM

      thanks... I've been told you're quite an expert! do haiku really have to be about nature? I recently heard some that were not.

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  4. Myron LysenkoApril 11, 2016 at 2:59 PM

    Yes, all haiku have to have something about nature in at least one of the lines. If it doesn't have nature in it, it is a senryu. The focus of your two poems is on human nature so they are both senryu.

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  5. Lizz Murphy PoetApril 12, 2016 at 5:50 PM

    Thanks Myron - that's an easy to remember definition!

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  6. Lizz Murphy PoetApril 12, 2016 at 5:52 PM

    Thanks Jeltje for a poem of simplicity which gets to the heart of migration.

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  7. jeltjeApril 13, 2016 at 4:47 PM

    Thanks Lizz.

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