Wednesday, May 11, 2016

Efi Hatzimanolis #95 Weather Warning (a drafty update)



gale force gust
unpegs the laundry
blows my socks off
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5 comments:

  1. Myron LysenkoMay 11, 2016 at 9:43 AM

    This one made me smile! A haiku usually shows two different images and in this way they create a juxtaposition and add depth. So you could think of another image for your final line:
    a gale force gust
    blows my socks off—
    …. …….


    I hope you do not mind me giving a suggestion.

    Best wishes,
    Myron.

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  2. Efi HatzimanolisMay 11, 2016 at 2:53 PM

    Thanks so much, Myron. Are you kidding! I greatly appreciate your generosity on this blog and I always see/learn something different from your comments. I love your suggestion!

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  3. chelateMay 11, 2016 at 4:56 PM

    I like the original but interested to see where else you would go with it too. the blows my socks off takes you off into a double level anyway. just my 2c

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  4. Michele SeminaraMay 11, 2016 at 7:10 PM

    Ha! Very nice.

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  5. Efi HatzimanolisMay 11, 2016 at 7:52 PM

    Thanks, Michele and Michele!

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