Bex powder Dell
Para.
"I suppose" - check.
"the head and chest"
use "my"
"Later on, I was to find out ..."
delete
Set in night. Keep it personal.
Show Kath entertaining.
Really good delirious scene.
"in those days" What days?
Keep it on yourself.
What food? What fun?
Show the proposal.
Use the senses -
Show the monkey invasion.
"great" "terrific" band -
What sort of music?
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