Sunday, January 8, 2017

Kerri Shying R - # 178 - Goo Goo Eyed


Goo Goo Eyed

she was scrolling with the one hand on her phone
eyes down     the leg-kicks of the baby on the skirt

front     a ticking pendulum    took my eye    the plain
prettiness  sweet curled head devoid of cradle cap

the way the one year old stares at the stranger    full
frank transmission     that unblinking send send

stuck inside this quandary    to start the chucks of
mucking up and blow up cheeks cross eyes   make with the

obviousness   falls inside the code of generations
but do I wait   here unseen inside the kinderworld

for another random eye to see me     you wait too long the nuance changes
goes dark     the kicking feet take an upward turn in tempo

still no word from Planet Mum     I break off the engagement
with real reluctance     but you can’t

punch the lady in the arm     just out of the blue
in Woolies say  hey     wake up

kiddo

6 comments:

  1. the way the one year old stares at the stranger full
    frank transmission that unblinking send send

    stuck inside this quandary to start the chucks of
    mucking up and blow up cheeks cross eyes make with the


    ... there are so many ways this could go --- forwards and backwards... v powerful
    ... I don't think the current ending lives up to the potential here ... but probably there's another piece combines with this I'm guessing

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  2. I love this poem, dear Kerri, and that moment you were so much there. Thank you.

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  3. P.S. My 2-cents-worth is...the ending is perfect. Maybe not intentional, but it runs down because you are walking away. No need for a crescendo or sage nod to end with. You wrote all that before, as (in the poem) you were experiencing and thinking it. :)

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    1. Thanks Rob, it is good to get different perspectives. It does have that hopelessness you get when you are not able to move either way and as you say must simple trickle off. xx

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